This is the dedicated forum for the 2012 24 Hour RPG competition, set in little spaces. Check out the sticky thread for the rules and please post successes, failures, ideas and rules clarifications.
Are you going to revise/expand Yes, But? I think you should. I think you should split out the core mechanics (it's perfectly readable, you wouldn't need to rewrite) and then provide the big cave as a setting.
It's not your native language? I couldn't tell! Kudos to you. What language is it? I'm sure I know someone in the free RPG blogosphere that can plug your game in your chosen langauge!
Yep, I'm from St. Petersburg, Russia. That's funny because I've learned English in the first place just because I wanted to play pen and paper rpgs, and there weren't any in Russian at the time.